As
usual, after fasting for one month Muslims celebrate Eid Al-Fitr. So I and my
family do.
In
the morning we prayed in the field not far from our house. After listening to
the speech of our preachers, we practiced prayer. Then we shook hands with
others. I got home, me and my family breakfast, we were taste our delicious
meals together and it was rare family gathering.
The
Eid Al-Fitr feast that year was celebrated two days, so it was very quiet
because I celebrated it in the first day. The next day we actually feel the
atmosphere of the feast of Eid Al-Fitr, lot of people come to my house. Once we
thought that the guest had not come back, so we decided to visit the homes of
our brothers that were not far from my home on foot. Finally, after we travel
from one house to other houses we got home to rest.
That
day I was very happy because I could hang out with my family. I feel the beauty
of Eid because there were people who I care were around me.
Name:
Nailis Sa’adah
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Name: Nurul Izzati
Peer's name: Nailis Sa'adah
Title of the recount text: The Beauty of Eid Al-Fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- ME AND MY FAMILY BREAKFAST ... ....--> ME AND MY FAMILY HAD BREAKFAST ...
- THEN NEXT DAY WE ACTUALLY FEEL THE ATMOSPHERE ... --> THEN NEXT DAY WE ACTUALLY FELT THE ATMOSPHERE ...
- ... LOT OF PEOPLE COME TO MY HOUSE --> ... LOT OF PEOPLE CAME TO MY HOUSE
- ... AFTER WE TRAVEL ... --> ... AFTER WE TRAVELED ...
- I FEEL THE BEAUTY ... --> I FELT THE BEAUTY ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) YES
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- ME AND MY FAMILY BREAKFAST ... --> MY FAMILY AND I HAD BREAKFAST...
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 18 X 4 = 72
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