When
takbiran night, I and my friend takbiran together in mosque and we takbiran
until midnight. After that at about 1 am
I to bought food in the stalls, after I ate I went to bed with slept.
After
that when I woke up in the morning, I’m happy because this time the feast of Eid
al-fitr, and I shower and then I put on new clothes and underwear. After that I
and my family went to the field together for Eid pray. Then, after I came home,
I apologize to my parents and other family.
Then
I went to my grandmother’s house formed friendship. After that, the other
brothers’ houses, because I’m tired I went to bed.
Later
in the morning I asked my school friends to former friendship to the teachers’
home. Then we went to the teacher, after all teachers we visited we went home.
Then I went home and rested.
Continued,,,,
Name:
Khafid Hilmawan
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1 comments:
Name: Achmad Choiron
Peer's name: Khafid Hilmawan
Title of the recount text: Eid of Fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) NO
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 4
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- AFTER THAT AT ABOUT 1 AM I TO BOUGHT .... --> AFTER THAT AT ABOUT 1 AM I BOUGHT ....
- I'M HAPPY BECAUSE THIS TIME THE FEAST ... --> I WAS HAPPY BECAUSE THIS TIME THE FEAST ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? NO
- AFTER I ATE I WENT TO BED WITH SLEPT --> AFTER I ATE I WENT TO BED TO SLEEP
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 2
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) YES
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- I AND MY FRIEND ... --> MY FRIEND AND I
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 16 X 4 = 64
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