In
this moment I will tell you about my story when eid. Because I forget about
what happen in last idul fitri, so I just tell what I did not forget. This
story was happened in eid 2011. Idul fitri is the most awaited moment when
Ramadhan.
This
story happened in the last day in Ramadhan. I’m so happy because tomorrow is
eid. But, I’m too sad, because today is the last day in Ramadhan. And when eid
was coming, I and my family prayed in field. After that, we went home to
breakfast and then went to my grand mother’s home. In there, we met some family
from my grand mother.
Next,
we went to home and rested before receiving guests. Like usual, my family
visited to neighbor.
I
think this eid was not different with last eid, but it still become the
happiest day.
Name:
Falah Ryansyah
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Name: Ahsan Soryadi
Peer's name: Falah Ryansyah
Title of the recount text: Eid
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- BECAUSE I FORGET ... --> BECAUSE I FORGOT ...
- I'M SO HAPPY .... --> I WAS SO HAPPY ....
- BUT, I'M TOO SAD ..... --> BUT, I WAS TOO SAD .....
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- eid --> Eid
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? NO
- grand mother's home ---> grandmother's home
SCORE: 0
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? YES
SCORE: 5
TOTAL SCORE: 18 X 4 = 72
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