One
day before the feast of Eid al-fitr. That night me and my friends performed
together takbiran in mosque and we takbiran until midnight. After that at
around 2 am I went home because I was sleepy and went to bed.
After
that when I woke up in the morning, I was happy because this time the feast day
of Eid, and I immediately shower and then I put on new clothes and underwear.
After that me and my family went to the mosque together for Eid pray. Then I
came home and apologized to the parents and other family.
Then
I went to homes of my grandfather and grandmother to form friendships. After I
shake hand and apologized I went home, because I’m tired I went to bed. I asked
my friend to former friendship to the neighbors, and then I formed friendship
together with my friend, after than I went home. My body feels tired after that
I went to sleep.
Later
in the morning I asked my school friends to formed friendship to the home of
teacher, and then we went to the place of teachers to form friendship. After
all of our teachers had been visited, we went home. Then I went home and
rested.
Name:
Abdul Ghofur
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Name: Ahmad Fatkhul Arif
Peer's name: Abdul Ghofur
Title of the recount text: Eid al-fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) NO
HE SHOULD ADD MORE SPECIFIC ABOUT EID, NOT TAKBIRAN
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 4
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- AND I IMMEDIATELY SHOWER ...--> AND I IMMEDIATELY TOOK A BATH ...
- AFTER I SHAKE HAND AND ....--> AFTER I SHOOK HAND AND ....
- BECAUSE I'M TIRED .... --> BECAUSE I WAS TIRED ....
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- One day before the feast of Eid al-fitr. That night me .... --> One day before the feast of Eid al-fitr, that night me ....
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 2,5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- THAT NIGHT ME AND MY FRIENDS .... ---> THAT NIGHT MY FRIENDS AND I ....
- THEN I WENT TO HOMES OF MY GRANDFATHER ..... --> THEN I WENT TO MY GRANDFATHER'S HOME .....
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 14,5 X 4 = 58
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