Introduce
my name is Muhammad Azwar Anas Al Arifi, usually I am called Azwar. I live in
the village of Wates Undaan Kudus. August 30th 2011, first I went
into the field to pray and heard sermons of id feast. After all this time
listened to the sermon, the sermon was finished, and I went home.
I
went home, I shook hands and apologized to my grandmother, then to my mother
and my brother and sister. After that I went with my family to the house of the
brothers of my mother and father.
Then
we went home and rested for a while until the evening. When night falls, my
family and I shook hands and apologized to our neighbors until we finished and
went home.
On
the second day, I and my family went to my uncle and aunt whose place was far
away.
Although
tired, but it’s enjoyable for me. And I am very happy because the feast day is
my favorite day.
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Muhammad Azwar Anas Al Arifi
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Name: Usamah al Anshory
Peer's name: Muh. Azwar Anas Al Arifi
Title of the recount text: My activities in the feast
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- WHEN NIGHT FALLS ... --> WHEN NIGHT FELL ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- My activities in the feast --> My Activities in the Feast
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 2,5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? YES
SCORE: 5
TOTAL SCORE: 20,5 X 4 = 82
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