Eid
this year is not too impressive to me, because at the time of the night before
Eid I did not go to the mosque with a friends because I am sleepy.
After
that when I wake up in the morning, I was happy because this time the feast day
of Eid and I immedietely shower. after that me and my family went to the mosque
together for Eid pray. then I came home and apologized to the Parents and other
family.
On
Eid this year I went to visit my grandfather, grandmother, uncle and other
relatives to apologize. After meeting my grandfather, grandmother and other
relatives we got home. The house very busy because we also have relatives who
came to our house.
I
grateful to be given the opportunity by God to be presentat this Eid although
less memorable for me.
Name:
Ahmad Choiron
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Name: Khafid Hilmawan
Peer's name: Achmad Choiron
Title of the recount text: Eid Al-Fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) NO
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 4
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- EID THIS YEAR IS NOT TOO IMPRESSIVE ... --> EID THIS YEAR WAS NOT TOO IMPRESSIVE ...
- ... BECAUSE I AM SLEEPY. --> ... BECAUSE I WAS SLEEPY.
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- .... I immedietely shower. after that .... --> .... I immedietely shower. After that ....
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? NO
- immedietely --> immediately
SCORE: 0
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? YES
SCORE: 5
TOTAL SCORE: 17 X 4 = 68
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