Saturday
evening 18th august, that right was actually night where the Muslims
in Indonesia reached last Ramadhan night, after did Ramadhan fasting one month
full, as usually in that night we (me and my friends) distributed zakat but I
can’t do that in that night because I had fever and that was a rainy night.
Sunday
19th august, at dawn after bathed and did dawn pray me and my family
went to yard to do eid al fitr pray. the eid al fitr is a symbolizes of winning
from evil after one month full of fasting, that made me proud with Islam
because with ramadhan fasting we can get more patiently.
After
eid pray we went to grandma’s house to keep touch with our mom’s big families
then we went to graveyard to pray for my mom’s father. After that me and my
family went to klaten to meet with my big family from father. in klaten I can
feel fresh air and play with my cousins.
After
four days we went to home. That was a beautiful experience altough that was a
usual we do after eid al fitr.
Name:
Usamah al Anshory
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Name: Muh. Azwar Anas
Peer's name: Usamah al Anshory
Title of the recount text: My eid al fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- BUT I CAN'T DO THAT ... --> BUT I COULD NOT DO THAT ...
- AT DAWN AFTER BATHED ... --> AT DAWN AFTER BATHING ...
- ... WE CAN GET MORE PATIENTLY --> ... WE COULD GET MORE PATIENTLY
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- ... to do eid al fitr pray. the eid ... --> ... to do eid al fitr pray. The eid ...
- klaten --> Klaten
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? NO
- altough --> although
SCORE: 0
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- IN THAT NIGHT WE (ME AND MY FRIENDS)... --> IN THAT NIGHT WE (MY FRIENDS AND I)...
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 13 X 4 = 52
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