Last
year of Eid al fitr, I visited to my relatives’ and to neighbors’ house.
First
day, I and my family go to mosque to execute Eid pray. After that, my family
and I prepared to go to my grandmother’s house. I left at 08.30 used motorcycles.
Come there were my aunt and uncle, I shook my hand with all enjoy, all food
existed in there. Around 11.00 I went to my aunt’s house.
At
05.00 pm, my family and I returned home. Get home I was direct of bath and rest
just, after prays Maghreb I continued my event to visit neighbors until 09.00
pm.
Second
day I went to cousin’s house. Fourth day, I visited to MTS teachers’ house, we
gathered in front of SPBU. Fifth day, I visited to Aliyah teachers’ house. When
we will leave, my friends had not come yet, so I had to wait them. That reason
made us had to be late.
When
evening, we had to return to our house. Although I was very tired, I was very
happy.
Name:
Nuzulia Rahmawati
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Name: Rahmana Faizah
Peer's name: Nuzulia Rahmawati
Title of the recount text: Moment Eid
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- ... I AND MY FAMILY GO TO ... --> ... I AND MY FAMILY WENT TO ...
- COME THERE ... --> COMING THERE ...
- GET HOME ... --> GETTING HOME ...
- ... I WAS DIRECT OF BATH AND REST JUST, ... --> ... I TOOK A BATH AND RESTED DIRECTLY, ...
- AFTER PRAYS ... --> AFTER PRAYING
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) YES
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- I AND MY FAMILY --> MY FAMILY AND I
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 18 X 4 = 72
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