Last
year, there were different dates in celebrating Eid. On 30 and 31 august 2011
was the day of eid al-fitr.
Last
Eid al-fitr feast was different than usual, because there are celebrated on
august 30 and 31. And at that time I celebrate on 30. Although different I
still celebrate it with gusto.
On
august 30 morning, I and my family perform Eid pray on the field. After that,
we went home. We got home to eat together before I and my family get ready to
go to grandma’s house. After getting ready we headed straight to grandmother’s
house on foot, because my grandma’s house was close enough from my house, which
was about 50 meters. When we got there, there are many brothers and sisters who
had come.
And
when the grandmother’s house a lot of joking house and when it will leave
usually greet out brothers and sisters. Once to grandmother’s house, my family
and I went to neighbors’ house. my family and I went to neighbors’ house to sillaturahmi.
The
next day at 31 I and my family went to neighbors that celebrate eid that day.
Although
celebrating the feast of eid al-fitr in different days, I’m still happy, even
though the atmosphere is different, the important thing I can gather with my
brother.
Name:
Zulfia Rahmawati
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Name: Zuhaidah
Peer's name: Zulfia Rahmawati
Title of the recount text: Eid on different day
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- BECAUSE THERE ARE CELEBRATED ... --> BECAUSE THERE WERE CELEBRATED ...
- ... I CELEBRATE ON 30. --> ... I CELEBRATED ON 30.
- ... I AND MY FAMILY PERFORM ... --> ... I AND MY FAMILY PERFORMED ...
- ... BEFORE I AND MY FAMILY GET READY ... --> ... BEFORE I AND MY FAMILY GOT READY ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- Eid on different day --> Eid on Different Day
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 2,5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- GUSTO --> ENTHUSIASM
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 15,5 X 4 = 62
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