My
name Ahmad Fatkhul Arif. I am usually called Afa. I live in a dormitory in the
Kudus city. When the feast day arrived, I and my friends of fraternity came
back to their hometown.
When
the feast day comes, I and my fraternity friends went to the field to perform
Eid pray, followed by a lecture Eid. Finish praying, I went back to the dorm and
was picked up by my families to return home. After the family arrived, I
returned to my hometown with my family.
Until
at home, I shook hands with the other family members. Then after that, I rested
for a while. After that, I formed friendships with my family, went to a
neighbor’s house until the afternoon. Then we got back home and rest while
preparing and packing of our good, because we plan to Eid with my grandmother’s
family in village.
The
next day, our family went to grandmother’s house. Getting there, we shook hands
with my grandmother’s family. We celebrate the feast day at grandma’s house for
a week.
I’m
very happy and satisfied Eid at grandma’s house.
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Name: Abdul Ghofur
Peer's name: Ahmad Fatkhul Arif
Title of the recount text: Eid al-fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES, BUT IT SHOULD BE Eid Al-Fitr
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 5
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- WHEN THE FEAST DAY COMES ....--> WHEN THE FEAST DAY CAME ....
- THEN WE GOT BACK HOME AND REST ...--> THEN WE GOT BACK HOME AND RESTED ...
- BECAUSE WE PLAN .... --> BECAUSE WE PLANED ....
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- the title, 'Eid al-fitr' --> Eid Al-Fitr
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 2,5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? YES
SCORE: 5
TOTAL SCORE: 17,5 X 4 = 70
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