The
last year, I celebrated ied day with my family. On that day, I and my family
left in the early morning. We went to court to ied pray together. After pray,
we heard a sermon. After the sermon finished, we returned to our home.
First
day, my parent went to grandmother’s house, but I can not follow, so I devided
to visit the neighbors with my brother and sister. And then I visited to my
friends with my friends other, and after my parent revert to home, we together
visited to uncle and my family other.
Second
day, I and my friends designed to visit teacher’s house. At 8 o’clock, we left,
we visited almost ten house and then we happy with that condition.
Third
day, almost same with second day. We were together did activities in the Eid
day.
Next,
fourth day, I designed with my friends to visited the big family teachers of
MAAHID. First we visited to teacher was nearby. There, we was very happy, and
we all continued until finished.
In
the Eid day, I very happy, because I can meet with my big family and my
friends. That’s all my experience in eid day.
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Name: Zulfia Rahmawati
Peer's name: Zuhaidah
Title of the recount text: The celebrated feast of ied fitri
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? NO, The Celebration of Eid al-Fitr
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) YES
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) YES
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 4
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- AFTER PRAY ... --> AFTER PRAYING ...
- ... BUT I CAN NOT FOLLOW ... --> ... BUT I COULD NOT FOLLOW ...
- THEN WE HAPPY ... --> THEN WE WERE HAPPY ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- The Celebrated feast of ied fitri --> The Celebration of Eid Al-Fitr
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? NO
- Ied --> Eid
SCORE: 0
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- SO I DEVIDED TO VISIT ... --> SO I DECIDED TO VISIT ...
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 12 X 4 = 48
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