Eid
day is the day that most exciting and also exhausted for me. Last year, my
activities from morning to night were very dense.
After
morning the eid prayer, me and my family went home a close relative of the
father. When finished, me and my family went to the grandmother’s house.
Arrived there, we are always greeted by a grandmother, when her grandchildren
come grandmother always spoiling her grandchildren.
Name:
Rahmana Faizah
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Name: Nuzulia Rahmawati
Peer's name: Rahmana Faizah
Title of the recount text: Activities at the feast of Eid al-fitr
1. Text Organization
a. Did the writer choose an appropriate title? YES
b. Does the text have complete structure? (orientation, sequences of events, reorientation) NO
c. Does Orientation state clear topic? (who, what, where, and when the event happened) NO, THERE IS NO CLEAR PLACE AND ALSO TIME
d. Do the events put in sequences? YES
e. Does each paragraph have elaboration (supporting sentences) in order to make the reader more understand about the writer's story? YES
SCORE: 3
2. Content
a. Does the text develop clear idea? YES
SCORE: 5
3. Grammar
a. Has the writer used past tense correctly? NO
- EID DAY IS THE DAY ... --> EID DAY WAS THE DAY ...
- ... AND ALSO EXHAUSTED FOR ME --> ... AND ALSO EXHAUSTING FOR ME
- WE ARE ALWAYS GREETED ... --> WE WERE GREETED ...
- ... WHEN HER GRANDCHILDREN COME ... --> ... WHEN HER GRANDCHILDREN CAME ...
- ... GRANDMOTHER ALWAYS SPOILING ... --> ... GRANDMOTHER SPOILED ...
b. Has the writer used preposition correctly? YES
c. Has the writer used linking words such as then, next, later, after than, etc in order to put the event in understandable sequences? YES
SCORE: 3
4. Punctuation
a. Has the writer used correct punctuation? (capital letter, coma, full stop, and apostrophe) NO
- the title, 'Activities at the feast of Eid al-fitr' --> Activities at the Feast of Eid Al-Fitr
b. Has the writer written their text using correct spelling? YES
SCORE: 2,5
5. Style
a. has the writer used various vocabularies? NO
- ... me and my family went home ... --> ... my family and I went home ...
SCORE: 0
TOTAL SCORE: 13,5 X 4 = 54
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